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breakinglight11) wrote2016-09-26 09:00 am
breakinglight11) wrote2016-09-26 09:00 am
Scene 2.3 of Fraser spinoff pilot - "Stranger in His Own House"
Yep, still pushing on with this! I have completely outlined the scenes of my Frasier spinoff pilot, and there's only a few more to go before I have a complete draft.
I still haven't come up with a better idea for what brings David and Alice to Boston at the same time other than he followed her there because of a stupid adolescent crush. I'm not in love with it, but I haven't been able to think of an idea that is a sufficiently offensive ulterior motive for David that doesn't make it a coincidence that they're both there. I just have to do my best to take him to task for being inappropriate, and not making Alice responsible for him after he violated her boundaries.
This scene would take place two scenes after "Grow Up," where Freddy discovers this. Between them there would be a confrontation between Freddy and David, where he takes David to task for his behavior. David will acknowledge his screw up, but also give insight into his struggle of never fitting into his family and how Freddy's just like their dads, so of course he doesn't understand. This scene is Freddy and Alice, where he gets her perspective and she tells him to take charge of David, since he needs somebody to be there for him and it can't be her.
This should probably have more jokes in it. It's a mostly serious scene, but still it should be funnier in some places.
EXT. RESTAURANT PATIO - DAY
TITLE CARD: THE HOUSE
Freddy waits at a table on the patio. When Alice arrives, he stands to greet her.
FREDDY
Hey, Alice. Thanks for meeting me.
ALICE
No problem. I was planning on giving you a ring when I got settled in, but so much for that.
FREDDY
Oh, God. I am so sorry. I swear I had no idea what he was doing.
ALICE
I wouldn’t be here if I thought you had. Though from stories my mom tells me, it sounds like ill-advised escapades kind of run in the family.
FREDDY
How is Aunt Roz these days?
ALICE
Shacked up with an Argentinian competitive ballroom dancer who’s half her age. So, you know. Awesome.
FREDDY
Well. Mazel tov! Listen, Alice, I just wanted to tell you I’m mortified about what happened. Can I ask you something? What happened with you and him?
ALICE
That’s it, Freddy— nothing happened.
FREDDY
I mean, of course, just— why’d he follow you?
ALICE
I guess we were pretty close. We basically grew up together. But he’s six years younger, so he started looking up to me. We would talk, you know. I think I was the closest thing he had to a family member who understood him. But I’m not family, really, and he started thinking that meant something more than it did.
FREDDY
Aw, geez. If I’d had any idea what he was here for, I would never have let him stay with me.
ALICE
I know you were just trying to help. It was good of you.
FREDDY
You know what, though? I thought I was doing him a favor, but… I started actually looking forward to being there for him. I guess I liked the idea that he needed me. So much for that, I guess.
ALICE
I don’t know about that.
FREDDY
What do you mean?
ALICE
I know David. He’s only stuck on me because doesn’t really have anybody who gets him. He definitely needs somebody to be there.
FREDDY
Geez, Alice, that’s really sweet of you, but you really shouldn’t have to take that on.
ALICE
Yeah, that’ll really help me assert my boundaries with the kid. Not me, genius. I mean you.
FREDDY
I don’t know what David needs. I don’t even know him.
ALICE
Then get to know him. He’s spent his whole life feeling like a stranger in his own house.
FREDDY
I think he just sees me as another one of those strangers.
ALICE
Maybe so, Freddy. But if anybody can do something to change that… well, at least you know what that house is like.
I still haven't come up with a better idea for what brings David and Alice to Boston at the same time other than he followed her there because of a stupid adolescent crush. I'm not in love with it, but I haven't been able to think of an idea that is a sufficiently offensive ulterior motive for David that doesn't make it a coincidence that they're both there. I just have to do my best to take him to task for being inappropriate, and not making Alice responsible for him after he violated her boundaries.
This scene would take place two scenes after "Grow Up," where Freddy discovers this. Between them there would be a confrontation between Freddy and David, where he takes David to task for his behavior. David will acknowledge his screw up, but also give insight into his struggle of never fitting into his family and how Freddy's just like their dads, so of course he doesn't understand. This scene is Freddy and Alice, where he gets her perspective and she tells him to take charge of David, since he needs somebody to be there for him and it can't be her.
This should probably have more jokes in it. It's a mostly serious scene, but still it should be funnier in some places.
EXT. RESTAURANT PATIO - DAY
TITLE CARD: THE HOUSE
Freddy waits at a table on the patio. When Alice arrives, he stands to greet her.
FREDDY
Hey, Alice. Thanks for meeting me.
ALICE
No problem. I was planning on giving you a ring when I got settled in, but so much for that.
FREDDY
Oh, God. I am so sorry. I swear I had no idea what he was doing.
ALICE
I wouldn’t be here if I thought you had. Though from stories my mom tells me, it sounds like ill-advised escapades kind of run in the family.
FREDDY
How is Aunt Roz these days?
ALICE
Shacked up with an Argentinian competitive ballroom dancer who’s half her age. So, you know. Awesome.
FREDDY
Well. Mazel tov! Listen, Alice, I just wanted to tell you I’m mortified about what happened. Can I ask you something? What happened with you and him?
ALICE
That’s it, Freddy— nothing happened.
FREDDY
I mean, of course, just— why’d he follow you?
ALICE
I guess we were pretty close. We basically grew up together. But he’s six years younger, so he started looking up to me. We would talk, you know. I think I was the closest thing he had to a family member who understood him. But I’m not family, really, and he started thinking that meant something more than it did.
FREDDY
Aw, geez. If I’d had any idea what he was here for, I would never have let him stay with me.
ALICE
I know you were just trying to help. It was good of you.
FREDDY
You know what, though? I thought I was doing him a favor, but… I started actually looking forward to being there for him. I guess I liked the idea that he needed me. So much for that, I guess.
ALICE
I don’t know about that.
FREDDY
What do you mean?
ALICE
I know David. He’s only stuck on me because doesn’t really have anybody who gets him. He definitely needs somebody to be there.
FREDDY
Geez, Alice, that’s really sweet of you, but you really shouldn’t have to take that on.
ALICE
Yeah, that’ll really help me assert my boundaries with the kid. Not me, genius. I mean you.
FREDDY
I don’t know what David needs. I don’t even know him.
ALICE
Then get to know him. He’s spent his whole life feeling like a stranger in his own house.
FREDDY
I think he just sees me as another one of those strangers.
ALICE
Maybe so, Freddy. But if anybody can do something to change that… well, at least you know what that house is like.