breakinglight11 (![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png)
breakinglight11) wrote2017-08-25 08:45 am
breakinglight11) wrote2017-08-25 08:45 am
Entry tags:
31 Plays in 31 Days, #25 - "Act Tonight"
As I said, I'm very close to running out of Gilded Cages scenes that are not excessively spoilery to post. But I've got writing for my game job to do this week, and of course I've got to actually edit the play for real. So I don't want to worry about writing new stuff for 31P31D right this second. So I'm just slamming down what remaining scene pieces I've got. For these last couple, the arcs may not be totally complete, but I'm just going to break them at the shifts that caused me to chunk them apart in the writing process in the first place.
Again, these scenes from the case need to be fixed up for logic and flow, but here's how they stood in draft one. Also, again, Mrs. Khan will be Mrs. Chaudhary to more accurate reflect the character's background.
Day #25 - "Act Tonight"
From Gilded Cages
By Phoebe Roberts
London, England, 1884
VICTORIA HAWKING, lady's society avenger
MARY STONE, her housemaid and protege
AMINA KHAN, their client
~~~
(The bell rings. MARY shows in MRS. KHAN.)
MARY:
Mrs. Khan! What brings you here? You ought to be preparing to leave town.
MRS. KHAN:
It’s happened. It’s what I feared most. I prayed it would spare them, but I knew. I knew!
MRS. HAWKING:
What are you are you talking about, madam?
MRS. KHAN:
It’s my son, my boy Nikhar. He’s gone. He’s been taken.
MRS. HAWKING:
Taken? Are you certain?
MRS. KHAN:
The house was tossed through. My daughter was bleeding from the mouth. She said men came, broke down the door, and knocked her out of their way to take her brother.
MARY:
And you think it was the gang?
MRS. KHAN:
Who else could it be? They took my boy to answer for his father’s deeds.
MARY:
Why would they do that?
MRS. HAWKING:
As leverage to keep Mr. Khan in check. Blast it. If nothing else, madam, it likely means your husband is indeed alive. And if your son is their bargaining chip, then he is worth to them more unharmed.
MRS. KHAN:
Blast that man! May he burn for what he’s brought upon us! Only you must find Nikhar. You must bring him home!
MARY:
Where would they have taken him?
MRS. HAWKING:
Can we speak to your girl? Can she tell us about the attack?
MRS. KHAN:
She’s only three years old. And I sent her with a neighbor to get her out of the city.
MARY:
Arthur said the gang is busy with something; they could move at any time.
MRS. HAWKING:
Then we can’t wait. We’ll have to act tonight as we planned.
MRS. KHAN:
What do you mean to do?
MRS. HAWKING:
We had thought to investigate quietly and see what we could learn about your husband’s whereabouts. But… with the boy, they’ll have eyes on him. He could be in the thick of it. There won’t be any way to get him out without their notice. Mary, get a message to that policeman. Tell him to be ready with reinforcements. We’re taking it all down.
MARY:
Yes, madam.
(MARY exits.)
Again, these scenes from the case need to be fixed up for logic and flow, but here's how they stood in draft one. Also, again, Mrs. Khan will be Mrs. Chaudhary to more accurate reflect the character's background.
Day #25 - "Act Tonight"
From Gilded Cages
By Phoebe Roberts
London, England, 1884
VICTORIA HAWKING, lady's society avenger
MARY STONE, her housemaid and protege
AMINA KHAN, their client
~~~
(The bell rings. MARY shows in MRS. KHAN.)
MARY:
Mrs. Khan! What brings you here? You ought to be preparing to leave town.
MRS. KHAN:
It’s happened. It’s what I feared most. I prayed it would spare them, but I knew. I knew!
MRS. HAWKING:
What are you are you talking about, madam?
MRS. KHAN:
It’s my son, my boy Nikhar. He’s gone. He’s been taken.
MRS. HAWKING:
Taken? Are you certain?
MRS. KHAN:
The house was tossed through. My daughter was bleeding from the mouth. She said men came, broke down the door, and knocked her out of their way to take her brother.
MARY:
And you think it was the gang?
MRS. KHAN:
Who else could it be? They took my boy to answer for his father’s deeds.
MARY:
Why would they do that?
MRS. HAWKING:
As leverage to keep Mr. Khan in check. Blast it. If nothing else, madam, it likely means your husband is indeed alive. And if your son is their bargaining chip, then he is worth to them more unharmed.
MRS. KHAN:
Blast that man! May he burn for what he’s brought upon us! Only you must find Nikhar. You must bring him home!
MARY:
Where would they have taken him?
MRS. HAWKING:
Can we speak to your girl? Can she tell us about the attack?
MRS. KHAN:
She’s only three years old. And I sent her with a neighbor to get her out of the city.
MARY:
Arthur said the gang is busy with something; they could move at any time.
MRS. HAWKING:
Then we can’t wait. We’ll have to act tonight as we planned.
MRS. KHAN:
What do you mean to do?
MRS. HAWKING:
We had thought to investigate quietly and see what we could learn about your husband’s whereabouts. But… with the boy, they’ll have eyes on him. He could be in the thick of it. There won’t be any way to get him out without their notice. Mary, get a message to that policeman. Tell him to be ready with reinforcements. We’re taking it all down.
MARY:
Yes, madam.
(MARY exits.)