Biweekly Theater Writing Challenge #13.5 - The Tailor of Riddling Way, scene 3

This is scene 3 of Tailor, a scene I've had in my head for a while but one I had a difficult time working out on paper. This is the part where Tom comes to Loring's End to discuss his commission, but is stopped by Officer Crier who tells him of Emma's death. This is also when he first meets Alice Loring, Emma's niece. As I said, I had a hard time writing this scene out, making all the elements I wanted in it flow into one another. It's still a little awkward, so I think it will end up requiring some real editing, but here's the first draft.

If you'd like to read the first parts in sequence, here are links to the entries where they're posted:
Scene 1
Scene 2
This one is Scene 3
Scene 4
Scene 5

*Sigh* If only I could write starting at the beginning and ending at the end. Then maybe I wouldn't ruin my own mystery.

( At least by finishing Scene 3 I have a solid written chunk... )