Mrs. Hawking scenes 3 (substantially rewritten) and 4 (significantly expanded)

The other day I came home to the lovely surprise of crearesperoand nennivianperforming a scene from Mrs. Hawking in my kitchen. It was the sweetest thing of them to do, and a real joy because they are my fantasy casts for Mrs. Hawking and Mary. It also gave me a real boost in attacking my next homework assignment, which was writing the first half of the play.

I have now just finished writing, and sending in to my teacher, that first half or so. I had a really hard time figuring out how to tell the story I wanted to tell. It's tough to construct a sensical mystery plot, where both protagonist and antagonist act to the best of their abilities, where neither of them ever "act stupid" for the sake of the story. I really hate that. But it's tough to build it well enough to avoid that, especially since I tend to be the sort of writer who decides what needs to be accomplished by the story and then designs it to achieve that.

Here are scene three, which I have substantially rewritten from even the second version I posted here, and scene four, which incorporates and significantly expands the small bit I wrote for 31 Plays in 31 Days. I've posted them together because they are closely connected, they flow more or less continuously one into the next. I will post scenes five and six separately, as the location and focus strongly shift.

( The newest versions of Mrs. Hawking scenes 3 and 4... )