Aug. 16th, 2014

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I started this scene for inclusion in Base Instruments, but the more I wrote it the less sure I was about it. While it's roughly in character-- Nathaniel wants Mrs. Hawking to show up to a family dinner while his brother Justin is in town, Mrs. Hawking doesn't want to go --I don't feel like the motivations are necessarily strong enough. Yeah, Nathaniel wants his aunt to act like she's part of the family, but he knows that she and Justin don't like each other and it's not likely to be a pleasant evening for anyone involved. I feel like he would be wiser than to force everybody into a situation that's likely to make the whole family miserable; he would instead pick his battles to work on developing relationships with her that both mattered to him more and had more of a chance of success, such as his and hers, or even hers and Clara's. Also, I think if Mrs. Hawking didn't want to go to an event, she just wouldn't; she's starting to value Nathaniel and his feelings more, but the concept of "but we're your faaaaaamily" just doesn't matter to her. She wouldn't make herself miserable to do any service to that. I don't like making characters do thing for the sake of drama or the plot that I don't feel are really in character.

I tried to make it work. I tried to give Nathaniel an outside reason for why he would insist on this-- tying it into his issues with Justin rather than just letting it rely on his desire to make his aunt connect with family. And I tried to make it so she was only trying to minimize her own misery by agreeing to the dinner on his terms, because the alternative would be worse. But I'm not sure I buy it. Also I don't know if I actually want to include that dinner happening in the story; I'm not sure what dramatic purpose it would serve. Although it might be funny just to see all these people fighting with each other under the guise of polite conversation, with Nathaniel frantically trying to make everybody just be nice to each other for one evening for God's sake.

Ah, well. Even if I don't use it, it's practice. And I won't have to try to recreate it if I decide that I want to.

Day #16 - "Family Dinner" )

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