Well, that was quick

[breakinglight11]

Ah, well. Got the rejection for my pitch. That was a short-lived period of self-satisfaction.

I figured this would happen, especially on my first time out. It will likely happen A LOT before I really get anywhere. But I did so well on the delivery, and the guy's immediate response in the session seemed positive-- better on both counts than I was expecting --that I let myself get my hopes up. Dummy, you always do that. But this is okay, this is good, I put myself out there, got a sense of how it works, so maybe I'll feel more confident and do better the next time.

The only real problem is I'm not exactly sure I understand how to interpret the feedback I got in order to improve the pitch. There was a report that I don't have a ton of context for, and I'm particularly having trouble understanding the scores in relation to some of the comments.

Here is the report and scorecard from Paramount. All scores are from 1-5.

10:20 Phoebe Roberts

Pitch delivery/presentation - 4

Clarity of pitch - 3

Set up protagonist(s) well - 3

Cool world - May be easier to have a book to base it off of - Consider writing it.

OR base it around a well known historical moment in order to get it made.

Cool characters - Continue to expand on the world.

Didn't connect with the story enough to want to pursue. Pass.

Hmm. Like, I assume that 3 on a 1 to 5 scale means "average," as it is the mathematical average of those numbers. But if I was "averagely" clear, what was I unclear about? What would be a "good" level of clarity, then, like a 4? I thought I did a good job on the delivery, which apparently with that 4 I did. So is 4 a "good"? I got another 3 on setting up the protagonists, but got the comment "Cool characters." I would think that "cool" is on the positive side, where "average" seems in the middle, neither positive nor negative. So what's not good enough? What should be in there that wasn't? I was expecting to get told my story was too big and expensive, but I'm not sure what I failed to explain in my pitch. I mean, I guess I shouldn't expect to give a perfect pitch MY FIRST TIME TRYING IT, but I'm not sure I know what the problems were.

And I know preexisiting IPs are what get made into movies these days, sigh, but the "write a book first" advice is kind of discouraging. I'm not a prose writer. I've done almost no prose fiction writing in the last five years, and I've been purposefully studying another medium. I don't even know if I'm good enough at it to write a good book of this. Also the idea of taking a year to write it, then trying to find a publisher (a process I know even less about than dramatic production) is a daunting prospect. Even if that would really work (which is no guarantee) I don't find the idea that appealing.

For the moment, I'm going to step away from it and get some distance. I've not had success trying to immediately edit anything; I get trapped in my "If I KNEW what it needed, I would have written it that way IN THE FIRST PLACE" fallacy. And because I'm not sure what to make of the feedback, I think I will soon try to pitch it again exactly the same way. Get another data point on it. If the feedback is the same, that might tell me something. If it's not, it may mean these things are a lot more a matter of taste. A lot of art things are.

I mean, yeah, I'm probably more disappointed than I should be. But I'm glad I tried it. I should try to focus on this as a victory, because it is.

Comments

[breakinglight11.livejournal.com]

Thank you for weighing in. Would you mind explaining to me what about the feedback made you think that? I'm struggling so much interpreting it and I'd be really curious if you could explain what the signals were to you.

[lillibet.livejournal.com]

Well, let's see. You get a 4 in presentation, so they like it/you, but only a 3 in clarity, and since they give both the world and the characters a "cool" what's left is the story, so that's where you're losing a point. They say they think there's a whole book in it, which again suggests they want you to put more into the story, but also that they need someone else to figure out how to market this before they'll take that chance. Combine that with Hollywood's notorious reluctance to fund original ideas (look at how few non-comedies are not based on a true story, a bestseller, a comic book, a remake, a formula) and that's how I come up with my reading of the feedback.

[breakinglight11.livejournal.com]

Thank you for this, that's really helpful!