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breakinglight11A ridiculous bit from the “Friendsgiving” episode I have been noodling on for Dream Machine. The premise of it is that when the shooting schedule runs over and everybody’s grumpy, nobody is able to travel for Thanksgiving. So Meredith tries to host everybody to try and raise spirits and do some team building, but folks are not feeling it. THEN HIJINKS OCCUR.
Other scenes I’ve written for this episode are, in rough order they would occur:
- ”Extreme Rendition”
- ”Friendsgiving”
- ”Emotional Potluck”
- ”Marching Orders”
- ”Competitive”
- ”Glorified Babysitters”
I think this one falls between “Marching Order” and “Competitive”. It’s very dumb and sitcommy, but with some polishing could be very funny. It also occurs to me that Devon should probably be in this scene, since he reacts to a certain character’s appearance. But I was trying to keep the character count down for some reason, so I kept some people out of the room. Still, I’ll have to fix that on a second pass.
Day #4 - “Special Delivery”
From Dream Machine
Episode 1.08 – “Friendsgiving”
Meredith Barry, writer’s assistant at Dream Machine studios
Leah Lucchesi, head writer of the “Offcomer” series
Josie Carraway, lead actress on “Offcomer”
Derek Kaplan, technical director at Dream Machine
Zach Barry, Meredith’s younger cousin
~~~
(Josie answers the doorbell to a handsome, smiling young man, ZACH, dressed in a deliveryman’s uniform. He carries a duffle and is referring to his phone.)
JOSIE: Ah… can I help you?
ZACH: I’m here with a special delivery for a very special someone.
JOSIE: Um, okay. Anyone expecting something?
ZACH: I hope not— this is supposed to be a surprise.
(He walks past her into the living room and sets down the duffle.)
ZACH: Anybody order… the complete package?
(Zach whips off his pants, and cheesy electro starts playing on his phone. He starts dancing.)
JOSIE: (Shrieks)
DEREK: Whoa!
LEAH: Hey there!
ZACH: Everybody will be giving thanks by the time I’m done!
JOSIE: Meredith! What’s going on here?
(MEREDITH enters from the kitchen and stops short.)
MEREDITH: Jesus Christ— Zach, what are you doing!?
ZACH: Oh, my God! Meredith?
DEREK: You know each other?
JOSIE: Oh, my God, you did order him? For Thanksgiving!?
MEREDITH: Order him? This is my baby cousin!
LEAH: He ain’t no baby!
MEREDITH: You know, the cousin who I told you was coming!
DEREK: What exactly did you tell him we were doing here?
ZACH: Meredith, I’m so sorry! Like I said, I was gonna come after I got off work—
DEREK: After who got off?
ZACH: I must have mixed up the addresses!
DEREK: Lucky them, they’ll have you dressed for dinner.
MEREDITH: This is that new job you got? Are you kidding me? I thought you were helping out with seniors!
ZACH: Technically— a lot of my clientele are older women!
JOSIE: Who orders a stripper on Thanksgiving?
DEREK: There you go— mostly older women, apparently.
MEREDITH: Ugh! Turn that thing off. Look at you— put that away! Put all that away! What would Auntie Mariela say?
ZACH: You aren’t going to tell her, are you? I said I couldn’t come home because I had Meals on Wheels deliveries.
MEREDITH: Go!
(She snatches up his duffle bag and throws it at him, ushering him out of the room.)
LEAH: No, no! This was finally getting fun!
DEREK: Easy, tiger. Have a little dinner before dessert.
Other scenes I’ve written for this episode are, in rough order they would occur:
- ”Extreme Rendition”
- ”Friendsgiving”
- ”Emotional Potluck”
- ”Marching Orders”
- ”Competitive”
- ”Glorified Babysitters”
I think this one falls between “Marching Order” and “Competitive”. It’s very dumb and sitcommy, but with some polishing could be very funny. It also occurs to me that Devon should probably be in this scene, since he reacts to a certain character’s appearance. But I was trying to keep the character count down for some reason, so I kept some people out of the room. Still, I’ll have to fix that on a second pass.
Day #4 - “Special Delivery”
From Dream Machine
Episode 1.08 – “Friendsgiving”
Meredith Barry, writer’s assistant at Dream Machine studios
Leah Lucchesi, head writer of the “Offcomer” series
Josie Carraway, lead actress on “Offcomer”
Derek Kaplan, technical director at Dream Machine
Zach Barry, Meredith’s younger cousin
~~~
(Josie answers the doorbell to a handsome, smiling young man, ZACH, dressed in a deliveryman’s uniform. He carries a duffle and is referring to his phone.)
JOSIE: Ah… can I help you?
ZACH: I’m here with a special delivery for a very special someone.
JOSIE: Um, okay. Anyone expecting something?
ZACH: I hope not— this is supposed to be a surprise.
(He walks past her into the living room and sets down the duffle.)
ZACH: Anybody order… the complete package?
(Zach whips off his pants, and cheesy electro starts playing on his phone. He starts dancing.)
JOSIE: (Shrieks)
DEREK: Whoa!
LEAH: Hey there!
ZACH: Everybody will be giving thanks by the time I’m done!
JOSIE: Meredith! What’s going on here?
(MEREDITH enters from the kitchen and stops short.)
MEREDITH: Jesus Christ— Zach, what are you doing!?
ZACH: Oh, my God! Meredith?
DEREK: You know each other?
JOSIE: Oh, my God, you did order him? For Thanksgiving!?
MEREDITH: Order him? This is my baby cousin!
LEAH: He ain’t no baby!
MEREDITH: You know, the cousin who I told you was coming!
DEREK: What exactly did you tell him we were doing here?
ZACH: Meredith, I’m so sorry! Like I said, I was gonna come after I got off work—
DEREK: After who got off?
ZACH: I must have mixed up the addresses!
DEREK: Lucky them, they’ll have you dressed for dinner.
MEREDITH: This is that new job you got? Are you kidding me? I thought you were helping out with seniors!
ZACH: Technically— a lot of my clientele are older women!
JOSIE: Who orders a stripper on Thanksgiving?
DEREK: There you go— mostly older women, apparently.
MEREDITH: Ugh! Turn that thing off. Look at you— put that away! Put all that away! What would Auntie Mariela say?
ZACH: You aren’t going to tell her, are you? I said I couldn’t come home because I had Meals on Wheels deliveries.
MEREDITH: Go!
(She snatches up his duffle bag and throws it at him, ushering him out of the room.)
LEAH: No, no! This was finally getting fun!
DEREK: Easy, tiger. Have a little dinner before dessert.
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